Things I Would Change: Looking back and re-reading this piece about a year in the future, there are several things I would change. I would attempt to flesh out some of the scenes that were meant to personalize or introduce the main character. Some of the scenes felt quite rushed. I would work way harder on improving clarity. Some of the scenes got quite confusing, the wording was sometimes very awkward, and the pacing wasn't always satisfying. There were a few grammar mistakes that weren't outwardly horrible (except for the one where I mistakenly swapped two characters' pronouns), but there are quite a few personal syntax changes I would make. The most glaring issue was the rushed ending, but that was less of an ignorance problem and more of a time management problem. For a rough-ish draft and my first multi-week single writing piece, I am actually quite proud of the general story, some of the descriptive language, the flow of events, and the ties I made with previous works. It isn't perfect, but I am glad to see I have improved enough in a year to clearly see issues I hadn't noticed before, and I have learned a lot from the experience. Another point I thought I'd highlight, as it is one I'm sure many struggle with, is that I made the dialogue too "railroady" and expositional, like I was just trying to provide information instead of construct a realistic conversation. Sometimes, at least for me, it's hard to distinguish this while I'm writing, but it's important to obtain habits that help you to avoid this.
Some parts I think I did well were certain descriptions, the tie-in with the other story, the general story of Thomas, the twists, the research I put into city layouts and highways & how they affected the story, and the ending description of the city.
Favorite scene to write: Thomas Latimer following the Black SUV / Favorite Scene: Thomas Latimer Driving Back from Idaho / Least Favorite Scene: The Description of Mack